My Horse Sets Me Free

[Yuliya]

My Horse Sets Me Free

I’m not strong enough
And my legs are too slow
The sky’s up too high
But I’m dying to know

What it’s like to race the wind
Whether the stars really talk to each other
Why animals always long to be free
And if humans really are nothing but a bother

It’s on days like these that I run to the stable
Where all I have to be is me
And as I open the stall, I know my questions will be answered
Because, you know, my horse sets me free

[Peregrine]

Very nice. You kept it short and to the point and didn’t go rambling on and on—which was good. The poem follows a consistent rhyme scheme (unlike mine, lol), which makes your poem easier for the reader to follow and gives it a more regular rhythm. I noticed the meter is different between the first stanza and the last, because of the difference in the two stanza’s length, but I like the effect that the that has on the poem. It’s like the first stanza is saying what the person wants and the next two stanzas are explaining how and why. Overall, a nicely written poem.